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Top 10 Things I Say To Authors at Conferences

stickfigureGIFoozThis past weekend I was at the New England SCBWI conference, Thinking Outside the Crayon Box, doing query critiques and manuscript critiques. First of all, I happen to love going to this conference. It’s impeccably run, pretty darn big, draws really top notch speakers, and the attendees are some of the nicest people ever. But I noticed that the words that were coming out of my mouth as I spoke to the authors to whom I was assigned were pretty much the same as they usually are when I go to conferences anywhere.

Here’s the scene: I sit across a small round table with an author on the other side. They are either nervous or not, friendly or not, open to hearing my input on their query letter or manuscript, or not. Regardless, I always try to make them feel comfortable, usually with a joke (which is usually a dumb one), and I remind them I’m just a regular person. Often they politely laugh at my jokes. I do try to make a difference for them and their writing. But I’ve found that besides the things that are particular to each person’s manuscript, there’s a recurring theme to the things I usually end up saying. Here are the top 10 things (in no particular order) that come out of my mouth when I’m critiquing query letters and manuscripts at conferences:

1. You’ve got a good premise here, but I don’t feel the writing’s where it needs to be yet.

2. You need to show more and tell less.

3. Your dialogue still needs some work. It doesn’t feel authentically teen/middle grade.

4. I’m sorry, I’m just going to slurp down some more of this coffee.

5. This feels like info dumping; try to sneak all this backstory into your narrative.

6. I’ve read your first 10 pages but nothing’s happened yet; this feels like throat clearing before your story starts.

7. One of the most important tasks of your first pages is to have your reader feel invested in your character and want to find out what happens to them next.

8. You have to know your market and know who your manuscript is geared to. Middle grade books are focused on readers between 8 and 12 years old; young adult fiction is geared towards kids who are about 12 to 18.

9. Your word count is way too high. OR Your word count is way too low. Try to familiarize yourself to the industry standards

10. Yes, I’ll be hanging out in the bar later with the other agents and editors! 😉

So, conference attendees who have heard any of these things from me, know that you’re in good company! And people who I will meet at conferences in the future? I’m certain I will be saying some of these things to you, too! But perhaps, now that you’ve read this blog post, you can go back to your manuscript and try to attend to some of these common pitfalls of writing.


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Friday Ramble: Road Trip to NESCBWI Conference!

For those of you who are waiting to hear who won the Flash Fiction contest, the winners will be posted next Wednesday, May 8th.

But for today: TGIF!

nescbwi13-logo-HI’m heading up to Springfield, Massachusetts this weekend, to participate in the New England SCBWI (Society of Children’s Book Writers and Illustrators) Conference. First of all, I’m really excited to be meeting some folks I’ve been chatting with on Twitter. I hope they know that I won’t be able to keep anyone’s name straight or attach those names in any coherent way to their faces and/or the faces they’ve shown me on their Twitter profiles. Just saying. But I’m told there will be some special candy imported from Buffalo, NY coming my way this weekend, so it’s all good.

Secondly, I’m  meeting with folks who have paid actual money for me to critique their query letters. I hope they know they didn’t pay that money for me to be particularly nice. I mean, I’m not a mean person (mostly), but I have been known to be a bit too straightforward on occasion. It’s fascinating to me how many people make the same mistakes. I broke my critiques up into 7 sections: The Introduction/Hook; Synopsis; Biographical Information; Structure of Query; Typos/Grammar/Word Usage; Reviewer Interest; and Additional Comments. I’m trying to be better about saying no to people’s faces, instead of saying, “Oh! Just send it!” For the ones I would pass on I’ve really just typed the no, but will still have to actually say it to them. I must say though that I’m blown away by how brave folks are for putting their work out there. I hate being the publishing dream killjoy, but I refuse to blow smoke up someone’s skirt either. And of course many people did many things right, too.

Lastly, my client, Stacy Mozer, and I are doing a breakout session on Saturday about what it looks like when you’re working on a manuscript with your agent and how your relationship with your agent can impact your manuscript. Stacy’s going to play the author and I’m going to play the agent. Should be fun! We made a fancy shmancy powerpoint and everything.

So, cheerio people! Go write <fill in your own number> pages on your work in progress and have a great weekend! I’m going to!


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