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FLASH FICTION CHALLENGE: The fate of Helga and Wolfgang

Two weeks ago, in one of client Joe McGee’s guest posts on dialogue, he used the following bits of dialogue, as different examples of what dialogue can accomplish:

“Honey, it’s a boy,” said Helga.Helga

“I’m so happy, I could raid a village,” Wolfgang said.

“Good, because we need milk.”


“Are you serious?” said Helga.

“Completely serious.”

“I don’t believe you,” she said.

“I’m serious,” said Wolfgang, “I drank all the milk…and ate their cows.”



“Busy!” He planted his axe in the giant’s foot.

“That’s no excuse,” said Helga.

“No excuse? I’m fighting a giant!”

“And I’m nursing a baby.”


“Milk. Now,” said Helga, slamming the shutters closed.


“So…” said the giant. He looked down at the axe in his foot. “Here we are.”

“Here. We. Are,” said Wolfgang. He smiled up at the massive creature. “Don’t suppose you’d like to help me with my axe? It appears to be stuck.”

“In my foot,” said the giant.

Wolfgang nodded. “Yep.”

“Not particularly,” the giant said. “I’d much rather squash you.”



“Wolfgang” by Joe McGee

But wait! What? That’s it!? What about Wolfgang? What about his axe? What about Helga and that baby? Will Wolfgang get the milk or will the giant squash him? I need to know!

So, that’s NOT it, my friends… YOU are challenged to pen the ending to Joe’s story. Be funny, be epic, be gritty, or romantic. Whatever you do, be creative. The story is yours!

Here are the rules to this FLASH FICTION CHALLENGE (and here, there be PRIZES):

1. You have 1 week to post your entry. The contest closes at 7am on May 1.

2. 650 word max.

3. Only 1 entry per person

4. Please post your entry as a comment to this challenge

5. The judges will be looking for creativity, good dialogue (this did start as a dialogue post after all), and a compelling/satisfying ending to the tale.

6. The judge’s panel consists of: Joe McGee, R.L. Saunders, and M-E Girard. They tell me they cannot be bought, bribed, or otherwise coerced… but wait! Is that bacon? Bacon wrapped in cheese? Joe, step away from the bacon…

8. A first place prize and a runner up will be awarded, with first place winning a first page critique of your manuscript by me and the runner up getting a book on the craft of writing (I’ll make sure it’s something you don’t already have).

9. The winner & runner up will be announced on Wednesday, May 8.

So, have at it! Let’s see what you come up with. The fate of the milk, axe, and our Vikings is in your hands. I can’t wait to see what you come up with.

**If you are one of my clients you can enter for fun but you are not eligible to win one of the prizes.


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